Here I am, back at it again with another commentary on one of my old, unfinished Wattpad work. This one was about two small town teens who are forced to live out five fairy tales by a meddling wizard. I published five chapters on my Wattpad account and started on a sixth chapter before I dropped the story and stopped updating.
Unfortunately, I can’t find any documents that contained my notes for this story, so a lot of my commentary about what it was supposed to be in the end will be based on memory.
Hope you all enjoy!
Skye and Finn I
1“I will now separate you into groups of two for the writing exercise.”
Finn laid his head on the desk. As much as he liked writing stories in English class, he hated when he had to work with others to do it. He preferred working alone. There wasn’t really anyone in the class he was friends with; they were acquaintances at the most. Now that he thought about it, in general, Finn didn’t have a lot of friends. It’s not like he didn’t want friends, it’s just that he was fine being alone. He’d much rather go for a walk through the woods and sit under his favorite tree with a book than go to a party.
He looked back up at his teacher.
As he looked at the pretty young woman at the front of the classroom, he could feel it.
As she paired up the students, he could feel it, he could feel it in his bones. He knew who his partner would be. It would be-
“Skye, you will be partnered with Finn.”
Finn sighed and slammed his head on the desk.
‘Why?’ he thought in exasperation.
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“Well this is going to be fun,” murmured Skye under her breath as she got out of her seat.
The whole reason she had taken this seat was to be as far away from him as possible as well as to ensure that they wouldn’t be paired up together.
That worked like a charm.
“Can I have a different partner?” said Finn, standing by his seat and raising his hand.
As Skye looked at the bespectacled half-Asian and hoped to God that Ms. Camble would say yes.
“What I give you is what you get. If I let anyone switch partner then everyone will want to and we don’t want a disaster like last time do we?”
Ms. Camble stared pointedly at Skye’s stepsisters.
Skye looked at her stepsisters as well. They were fifteen just like her and twins. Their names were Amy and Addy2 and all three of them just happened to have the same Honors English class.
Skye was honestly surprised they had ANY honors classes with how they acted. Skye wasn’t very attached to the twin brunettes3, they had only been living together since last summer after all. When their parents realized how close in age they were, they immediately assumed that the three of them would be best friends ,but that was not the case. They didn’t really argue much ,but they had very little in common.
The twins were boy crazy to say the least. They were often talking about who was the cutest boy and who was worth dating. They seemed to always be gossiping about other people and were quite the drama queens. Skye didn’t hate them ,but their behavior often got on her nerves.
“You two have learned your lesson about that kind of fiction ,correct?” asked the teacher with her arms crossed.
“Yes,” replied the twins in unison.
‘Yes, never again. Please save the smut for your fan fictions4 ,at least I can avoid having that read to me! We did NOT need to know about how-‘
“Moving on, please take a seat next to your partners,” said Ms. Camble, interrupting Skye’s thoughts.
With a sigh, Skye took a seat next to Finn. The two stared silently at each other. They already knew how this was going to end. The point of the exercise is was to create an outline for a story, they didn’t even have to write a full story together, but that would be enough to start something.
“Why don’t you two start by sharing your ideas?” suggested Ms. Camble, taking a seat by the two.
Skye sighed and closed her eyes. “Very well,” she said. She opened her eyes and began her proposition.”How about the story be about a detective with only a few months to live who’s trying to catch a serial killer who targets newly weds with the help of her three friends?”5
“Okay, now Finn, do you have an idea?” questioned Ms. Camble.
“Yes, I do. How about a story about a 12 year old who finds out that he is a wizard and goes to a school to learn how to use magic,” said Finn.
Skye scoffed. “That’s so unoriginal, you stole that from J.K. Rowling.”
Finn scowled. “Unoriginal? Says the person who just ripped off James Patterson!”
The argument escalated from there. It came to the point where they were insulting each other’s favorite genres.
“Fantasy is just for people like you who can’t handle the struggles of real life!” shouted Skye.
“Oh yeah, well the reason why people like you hate fantasy is because you lack the imagination needed to imagine something you can’t see everyday!” shouted Finn.6
“That is enough you two!” shouted the teacher.
The two of them fell silent and realized that everyone was staring at them.
Though she was sure her dark brown skin hid it, Skye felt a rush of heat come to her face.
Though Finn had his face turned from her, he was blushing as well.
“Both of you, disturb the class again with an argument like that and you will both be sent to the principal’s office! Am I understood?” said Ms. Cambel.
“Yes, Ms. Cambel,” murmured the two.
“Good.”
The two sat back in their seats and glared at each other.
It would be a miracle for them to work together.
1.This story had a title like a light novel. I’d probably go for something more concise if I was writing it now.
2. I’d probably pick more interesting names now
3. In the final arc of the story, Amy and Addy were going to be the wicked stepsisters.
4. I really had these girls reading smutty fanfiction in class…
5. This is a reference to “First to Die” by James Patterson. Which, now that I’m thinking about it, is kind of suprising I read back then.
6. I wanted Finn and Skye to start of as enemies and gradually become friends, but I’ve always wondered if their animousity towards each other felt warranted/realistic.
7. Obvious foreshadowing is obvious
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